After our discussion and review of the above presentation, please post 3 thesis statements using the topics from the textbook on page 26 or use one of your own.
The reflection of troubled teenagers growing up relies on the neglection of parenting from their homes because most parents do not listen when there is a problem , have lack of communication,and dont do a good job nurturing their children.
Being a drug abuser has led to the spread of many negative outcomes in life concerning the slowness in your thoughts and ideas, the decline in a job oppertunity, and the lack of love and support from your friends and family.
1)To raise a children right you have to discipline them by having conversation with them, listening and uderstanding them, and giving them postive feedback.
2)Bullying affects children more then other because they can get their feeling hurt more easily.
3)STDs affect parents relationship with children with the lack of comunication that they used to have.
Due to the changes in the economy and how adults and teens are finding the situation to get a college education is more important today then many years ago.
To have a great party you will need the following great music, a great selection of food and snacks, and lots of people that know how to party. Bullying happens all around the world and it effects everyone in everyday life such as mental, physical, and verbal. As kids grow up with their parents their relationship with their parents should include communication, skills to treat them right, and have good listening skills. Kenneth Cusido
Rosie: I like what you've done with your thesis statements. You are starting to get the hang of how an effective one should read. One thing I would suggest is that you read over for usage problems in your writing, such as reflection and neglection. If in doubt, keep it simple.
1) A great or terrible party. Thesis: Great or terrible parties occur on a daily basis but it all depends on the people you invite, the kind of drinks you have, and the enviorment where the ocassion is taking place.
2) Bullying Thesis: Bullying happens all around the world and so many people are being mentally , verbally and physicaly abused for no major reasons.
3) Ways of disciplining children Thesis: Many parents dont know the right way to dicipline their child , but the three main ways are communication , postive feedbacks, modulating voice.
1. How can you have a good and a bad day at school? Thesis: Good and bad days at school occur at school according to the people whom you are with, the amount of rest you have and the activities you have done during the day.
2. why is there so much hatred among us human beings? Thesis: People in this world have hatred towards each other because of money, religion, and jealousy.
3. Should birth control be legal or illegal? Thesis: Birth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Mayra: what about the importance of a college education? How does it improve one's chances for advancement, growth and better jobs?
Make sure you are restating the question as a statement and offering insight as to the answer and what points you will address in your body as support.
1. How can you have a good and a bad day at school? Thesis: Good and bad days at school occur at school according to the people whom you are with, the amount of rest you have and the activities you have done during the day.
2. why is there so much hatred among us human beings? Thesis: People in this world have hatred towards each other because of money, religion, and jealousy.
3. Should birth control be legal or illegal? Thesis: Birth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Any time someone is under the influence of drug their whole perspective change this has torn families friends and maybe your Relationship. Teen drug abuse can ruin a person not only you but your loved ones also.
Drug abuse Drug abuse affects the parents and everyone around you by losing your loved ones, disapointment, and respect for the ones the care for you. College Education College Education will be very important in your life because you will be better educated, and find a good job thats right for you. Ways of disciplining children There are many ways to disciplining a child but the best way is having patience and communication with them about their problems. Luis C.
Maricela: Good work! You are getting the hang of how to use this method to write and effective thesis!
What will bring your theses to the next level is fine-tuning some of the wording in the statements. Focus particularly on your verbs, such as "causing" and "concern". They may not apply as the best choice for each item in your list.
Drug abuse has always had negative effects on everyone's life. It leads to loved loosing care for you, money being wasted and damage to your body.
Gang affiliation has a negative effect on our neighborhoods and makes parents scared. It causes parents to be worried, neighborhoods starts to get ruined and so do the persons life.
Smart phones have hindered our ability to function as we did in the past. Now days phones have become a "survival kit" to young teens. They are often used as guidance, entertainment, and it takes a lot from young teens life that can lead to sicknesses.
1. Drug abuse is a bad road no one wants to walk on. It leads to many directions such as neglection from family , losing respect from peers, and causing bad health for your own future.
2. A great wedding makes you realize or understand what love is. It makes you think how a couple are willing to go the distance willing to be together.
3. There are many types of family reunions such as cousins , aunts, uncles, who haven't seen either for a good amount of years. Maybe family reunion such as a long lost brother or sister whom you never met before.
Orquidia: Your statement on drug abuse is a good beginning for a thesis. Some careful rewording will help it read clearly and be a strong start for an essay. I clarified your language and what emerged is the start of a great essay:
Any time a teen is under the influence of drugs, her whole perspective changes. This has torn families, friends and even romantic relationships apart. Teen drug abuse can ruin not only the drug user, but her loved ones also.
Farheen: You definitely understand what goes into a thesis. Great! Now your challenge will be to smooth out the edges in how you turn a phrase and have add panoche to your writing. I'll pick out the statement that stands out the most to me:
Birth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Instead, how about: Birth control should be legal because the consequences of unintended pregnancy for a teen are far outweigh the drawbacks of their availability.
OR
Sexual Abuse, termination of a pregnancy and under preparedness to raise a child are just some of the problems teens face in the absence of birth control.
(Although I'm not sure how sexual abuse really fits here!)
The existence of bullying is happening all around the world effecting people physically, verbally, and mentally.
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The reflection of troubled teenagers growing up relies on the neglection of parenting from their homes because most parents do not listen when there is a problem , have lack of communication,and dont do a good job nurturing their children.
ReplyDeleteRosie
Being a drug abuser has led to the spread of many negative outcomes in life concerning the slowness in your thoughts and ideas, the decline in a job oppertunity, and the lack of love and support from your friends and family.
ReplyDeleteRosie
The importance of a college education and how it improves the advance for growth and better jobs.
ReplyDeleteMayra
Gang members affect people in causing them fear, awareness of their surroundings and taking self defense classes in case of attacks.
ReplyDeleteDrug abuse directly affect the familys' dynamic, major concern from parents and possible violence from the drug abuser.
College education positively affects future family, stable life style and the oppurtunity to work in the enviorment that you love and studied for.
Maricela Garces
1)To raise a children right you have to discipline them by having conversation with them, listening and uderstanding them, and giving them postive feedback.
ReplyDelete2)Bullying affects children more then other because they can get their feeling hurt more easily.
3)STDs affect parents relationship with children with the lack of comunication that they used to have.
Adriana
Due to the changes in the economy and how adults and teens are finding the situation to get a college education is more important today then many years ago.
ReplyDeleteMayra
To have a great party you will need the following great music, a great selection of food and snacks, and lots of people that know how to party.
ReplyDeleteBullying happens all around the world and it effects everyone in everyday life such as mental, physical, and verbal.
As kids grow up with their parents their relationship with their parents should include communication, skills to treat them right, and have good listening skills.
Kenneth Cusido
Rosie: I like what you've done with your thesis statements. You are starting to get the hang of how an effective one should read. One thing I would suggest is that you read over for usage problems in your writing, such as reflection and neglection. If in doubt, keep it simple.
ReplyDelete1) A great or terrible party.
ReplyDeleteThesis: Great or terrible parties occur on a daily basis but it all depends on the people you invite, the kind of drinks you have, and the enviorment where the ocassion is taking place.
2) Bullying
Thesis: Bullying happens all around the world and so many people are being mentally , verbally and physicaly abused for no major reasons.
3) Ways of disciplining children
Thesis: Many parents dont know the right way to dicipline their child , but the three main ways are communication , postive feedbacks, modulating voice.
Francheska Badia
-College education is important so you can succeed in life,get a better job and just to be more educated.
ReplyDelete-Everyday so many children commit suicide because they are bieng bullied at school.
-There is different ways of disciplining your children like,time out,modulating your voice, listening, understanding and taking things away.
Sulma Vasquez
1. How can you have a good and a bad day at school?
ReplyDeleteThesis: Good and bad days at school occur at school according to the people whom you are with, the amount of rest you have and the activities you have done during the day.
2. why is there so much hatred among us human beings?
Thesis: People in this world have hatred towards each other because of money, religion, and jealousy.
3. Should birth control be legal or illegal?
Thesis: Birth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Mayra: what about the importance of a college education? How does it improve one's chances for advancement, growth and better jobs?
ReplyDeleteMake sure you are restating the question as a statement and offering insight as to the answer and what points you will address in your body as support.
1. How can you have a good and a bad day at school?
ReplyDeleteThesis: Good and bad days at school occur at school according to the people whom you are with, the amount of rest you have and the activities you have done during the day.
2. why is there so much hatred among us human beings?
Thesis: People in this world have hatred towards each other because of money, religion, and jealousy.
3. Should birth control be legal or illegal?
Thesis: Birth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Farheen Abbasi
Any time someone is under the influence of drug their whole perspective change this has torn families friends and maybe your Relationship. Teen drug abuse can ruin a person not only you but your loved ones also.
ReplyDeleteOrquidia Rodriguez
Taking the steps towards a college education leads to many opportunity to advance your self and family due to loss of jobs and lack of jobs.
ReplyDeleteMayra
Drug abuse
ReplyDeleteDrug abuse affects the parents and everyone around you by losing your loved ones, disapointment, and respect for the ones the care for you.
College Education
College Education will be very important in your life because you will be better educated, and find a good job thats right for you.
Ways of disciplining children
There are many ways to disciplining a child but the best way is having patience and communication with them about their problems.
Luis C.
Maricela: Good work! You are getting the hang of how to use this method to write and effective thesis!
ReplyDeleteWhat will bring your theses to the next level is fine-tuning some of the wording in the statements. Focus particularly on your verbs, such as "causing" and "concern". They may not apply as the best choice for each item in your list.
Peer presure has a strong power to influence us either to good or bad habits that surround us around.
ReplyDeleteThere's nothing worst for a child to be abuse by his own parents.
A college educated student gets well recompense after all years of hard work by having more opportunities open in life to succeed.
Elizabeth V.
Smartphones are the most popular type of fone today.
ReplyDeleteTeen drug abuse leads to addiction and addiction is an incurable disease.
Gang membership leads to trouble and failure to school.
Sex has become such an essential part of a relationship that without sex, it causes stress to the relationship and creates sexual tension.
ReplyDeleteJust like the word love, lust has become a common act in relationships due to the peer pressure, fear of losing one, and often times just for fun.
Between TV ads, songs, logos, and phrases, the media has greatly influenced the new generation’s idea that sex is mandatory in relationships.
Drug abuse has always had negative effects on everyone's life. It leads to loved loosing care for you, money being wasted and damage to your body.
ReplyDeleteGang affiliation has a negative effect on our neighborhoods and makes parents scared. It causes parents to be worried, neighborhoods starts to get ruined and so do the persons life.
Smart phones have hindered our ability to function as we did in the past. Now days phones have become a "survival kit" to young teens. They are often used as guidance, entertainment, and it takes a lot from young teens life that can lead to sicknesses.
1. Drug abuse is a bad road no one wants to walk on. It leads to many directions such as neglection from family , losing respect from peers, and causing bad health for your own future.
ReplyDelete2. A great wedding makes you realize or understand what love is. It makes you think how a couple are willing to go the distance willing to be together.
3. There are many types of family reunions such as cousins , aunts, uncles, who haven't seen either for a good amount of years. Maybe family reunion such as a long lost brother or sister whom you never met before.
-Danny Bastidas
a) Three characteristics a good boss shoul have are to set a good example to others and to do a good job and be flexible.
ReplyDeleteb)College education is very important for todays life.With college education people can have better jos and better salaries.
c)The most important event in my life was when my little sixter born. I was seven years and I have new experiences as an old sixter
Gisela Rivera
DRUG ABUSE:
ReplyDeleteDrugs can affect friends, family and their surroundings by creating violence, robbery, and even death.
BULLYING:
Bullying affects everyone by deveopling depression, lowering self-esteem and creating suicidal thoughts.
HATRED:
There is so much hatred among human beings due to jealousy, racism and greed.
Sharlene Morales
Francheska: Good work! You have the thesis statement down and your statements are clear and well-phrased.
ReplyDeleteOrquidia: Your statement on drug abuse is a good beginning for a thesis. Some careful rewording will help it read clearly and be a strong start for an essay. I clarified your language and what emerged is the start of a great essay:
ReplyDeleteAny time a teen is under the influence of drugs, her whole perspective changes. This has torn families, friends and even romantic relationships apart. Teen drug abuse can ruin not only the drug user, but her loved ones also.
Farheen: You definitely understand what goes into a thesis. Great! Now your challenge will be to smooth out the edges in how you turn a phrase and have add panoche to your writing. I'll pick out the statement that stands out the most to me:
ReplyDeleteBirth control should be legal due the fact that there are teens that accidentaly get pregnant, sometimes they are sexually abused, and giving birth to child requires stability in both he child's and the mother's life.
Instead, how about:
Birth control should be legal because the consequences of unintended pregnancy for a teen are far outweigh the drawbacks of their availability.
OR
Sexual Abuse, termination of a pregnancy and under preparedness to raise a child are just some of the problems teens face in the absence of birth control.
(Although I'm not sure how sexual abuse really fits here!)
Drug Abuse takes control of your mind and spirit. Life is not the same after someone abuses drugs.
ReplyDeleteSafe Sex is the only way to perform a healthy and happy sex life with out any concerns.
Bullying occurs every second of the day and can cause someone enough hurt to take their own life and/or someone else's life.
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